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i didn’t fall in love with you
until your skin was already grey and i
had to tell you what the weather was like
since you couldn’t leave your bed.

i didn’t mind long nights in the hospital
because making you laugh brought a warmth
to my cheeks that burnt hotter than a
forest fire, you never laughed at me for blushing

i snuck you in alcohol and forbidden foods
and pushed you around in that rusted wheel chair,
and all the nurses looked at us with
miserable eyes that said more than the doctors
would ever tell me.

naively i thought it was good news
when you said they were sending you home; but
when i saw you strewn across your wine red sheets
my heart was heavy with foreboding, and
neither one of us said anything while i
slid an iv into your paper-skin hand, so
i never asked if you were okay.

we kissed and i didn’t comment
on your snowflake lips or the fact that
your hands shook like earth quakes when
they grazed my thigh and i held you tightly
like if i could keep all your pieces together
you’d never break apart,
but the world is never that easy.

for forty-seven days we laughed
and cried, and kissed, and fucked and fought
in that bed;
your mom knew but she still let me stay the night.
i heard her weeping through the walls,
i never knew she was counting down the minutes
that we still had together.

after forty-seven mornings of you
kissing me awake i was confused by
the feeling of sunlight on my lips and
i will never forget the way it cast
shadows across your sullen face.
they say the heart knows before the brain does;
it must be true because i felt the avalanche in my chest
and i don’t know if i’ll ever stop crying because
your mouth was pursed as if
you had tried to say goodbye but
God was dead set on fucking us over,
one last time

i had a dream last night
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Given 2014-05-30
Goodbye by crushasphyxia is an intense, impactful piece conveying the feeling of slowly losing a loved one. ( Featured by IrrevocableFate )
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
How sad. You've done a wonderful job with this.
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WhisperingWillow19 Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I am speechless. Dreams like that are always the worst dreams to have. But nevertheless, I have them quite often. 


~Fang. 
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pearwood Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Beautifully written.
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ShadowIsStillAlive Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, that was like a sucker-punch to my feelings. Good job on the poem, and, assuming this has happened to you, I hope you start to heal, and I hope they rest in peace.
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JaneyArt Featured By Owner May 30, 2014   Traditional Artist
As a traditional artist who rarely reads anything on here, I read this .... it painted a picture for me with words. 
I am not a writer but I can imagine that would not be an easy thing to do, so congrats on the much deserved DD. 

I didn't even notice the lack of capitals or anything else you have been (in my opinion) unfairly critiqued on. 
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tirasunil Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful, very sorry for this. :( God didn't take this person, though. Just wanted to say that. 
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MilaJay Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Impressive!! :)
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animelover7032 Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
;-; This is beautiful. Congrats on the DD!
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats on the DD, regardless of what any other comments have said, this is a very touching and heartfelt piece. It carries a strong voice and a clear message which are some of the most important things when writing poetry :heart:
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Kira-Jones Featured By Owner May 30, 2014
It beautifully played and snapped my heart strings 
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